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Character: Elijah Michael Gregor Player: LankyOgre
Template: Sorcerer
High Concept Aspect: Catholic Sorcerer
Trouble Aspect: Burn the Witch!
Appearance
Elijah is an everyman of sorts. He has red hair and freckles and stands just under 6' tall. He usually wears khakis or dress pants and a polo or button down shirt. He's 28 and has been in or at some form of university since he graduated high school and he acts that way.
ASPECTS
Catholic Sorcerer: Elijah is on the payroll with the Archdiocese of Los Angeles and is called to investigate problems when mundane matters fail. (High Concept)
Invoke: Trials of faith, resources, access to knowledge
Compel: 10 commandments, obligations,
Burn the Witch: While there are a few priests and laypersons who are aware of the supernatural world, most individuals involved with the church are clueless and here are some who will actively work against him if they know he is a sorcerer.
Invoke: Fly under the radar, hide sorcerer powers, send the pitchforks another way
Compel: limit options,
Background
Elijah was born and raised in Los Angeles as the youngest of 6 children. While in high school Elijah watched as kids got picked on, one time he tried to get involved and accidentally threw a table in the way, from across the room. Confused he confessed to a priest, believing himself possessed. Fortunately for Elijah, the priest had an idea that there were supernatural things in the world and was able to get Elijah assistance.
One Big Happy Family: Elijah was raised as the youngest of 6 children and had a happy stable home his entire life. He still has family throughout the Los Angeles area that he can call on if needed.
Invoke: resources, assistance, faith, how to act around people
Compel: hostages, threats
Rising Conflict
While in college, Elijah studied at the University of Dallas and in Rome. Soon after college, Elijah became involved with a series of problems the church could not deal with through mundane channels.
Classically Educated: Elijah has a firm grounding in classical literature and history, but skipped a lot of science concepts. He also is awkward around many of his peers and misses pop culture reference frequently.
Invoke: Lore checks, scholarship checks, dealing with “myths”
Compel: Clueless on pop culture, naive with the real world
The Story: The Hazards of Travel
During his senior year of college, Elijah went on a mission trip to Honduras. The village had a string of missing persons and Elijah couldn't keep his nose out of it. He accidentally unmasked a Red Court Vampire and manage to disrupt the creatures plans.
They Do Exist: Despite having magical powers, Elijah never understood the amount of other things that could also exist. Every time he encounters something new it is a surprise. Frequently Elijah misses clues that hint to something he has read about if he hasn't encountered it in life.
Invoke: Lore and scholarship checks vs. the known,
Compel: Investigation on the unknown, what I already know
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SKILLS
Superb (+5) Conviction, Discipline
Great (+4) Lore, Scholarship
Good (+3) Alertness, Investigation
Fair (+2) Athletics, Fists, Rapport
Average (+1) Contacts, Driving, Empathy, Endurance, Presence
STUNS & POWERS
[-3] Evocations
[-3] Thaumaturgy
[-1] The Sight
[-1] Bless This House
[-1] Guide My Hand
Total Refresh Adjustment: -9
Crucifex (focus): +1 defensive power for spirit evocations
Piece of the Blarney Stone (focus): +1 offensive control and +1 offensive power for earth evocations
St. Michael the Archangel Medal (enchanted item): armor:2 or block:4 3/session
Rotes
Gread:
type: earth evocation, offensive maneuver
Power: 6 Shifts – 3 strength, 2 zone, 1 duration (requires Blarney Stone)
Target: 1 zone
Duration: 2 exchanges
Opposed by: Athletics
Effect: Everyone affected has the OFF BALANCE aspect applied.
áladh
type: earth evocation, offensive attack
Power: 6 Shifts – 5 strength, 1 duration (requires Blarney Stone)
Control: Discipline to target
Target: 1 target in line-of-sight, inflicting physical stress
Duration: 2 exchanges
Opposed by: Might
Effect: Everyone affected has the OFF BALANCE aspect applied.
Bloasc
Type: Spirit evocation, defensive block
Power: 5 shifts
Control: Roll Discipline plus applicable specializations
and focus items
Duration: One exchange
Effect: Deflects an incoming attack. If overcome,
it vanishes.
Scaird
Rocks and rubble burst from the ground, spraying at his enemies
type: earth evocation, offensive attack
Power: 6 Shifts – 6 strength (requires Blarney Stone)
Control: Discipline to target
Target: Target (would I have to declare the number of targets in the rote?)
Duration:one action
Opposed by: Athletics
My wife thinks he should be Irish Catholic, so I need to rewrite his description a little more.
I'm also not sure about the third element. Should I do Fire? Should I have one rote from a different element? I just realized that because of my current focus set-up I'm not using my specialization in earth on any of the rotes. Would it be worth upping one rote to a 7 shift (2 stress) since I have the control/discipline to handle it?