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Sijo Poem help
« on: March 25, 2010, 03:54:07 PM »
I am considering entering a Sijo contest, and am trying to figure out what to do for it...

Do you think this is good? Or should I write a new one?

Mother Earth, Mother Nature gives us her love gives us her care
All she can she provides, from the earth below to the air up high
From the running water to the gleam in my lovers eyes

One thing I am worried about is my use of the word "lover" being misinterpreted. Do you think I should change that?
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