What I can remember is that you can always use your sponsored magic, but any self inflicted consequences take on the nature of the sponsored magic. I don't think that your sponsor has to OK every time you use the magic. Now what I know you have to get an OK on is taking a sponsored debt. The reason I like the idea of sponsor themed consequences is that the sponsor can compel you to do things through the consequence you took along with compels through debt.

I don't really need aspects, but I'd like to see how you'd make basically a modern day van helsing who's working for the super top secret government paranormal agency and compare it to mine.

You could also just have the person thematically make a hat with the power "demense". Just use thaumaturgy to effectively give the PC demense for -2 refresh (my group does double refresh + duration) and then one shift for each spot on the time table.

Well here's the curious thing about it being -3. Back on page PP 248 (right side 4th paragraph) it says if you want to be a practitioner with ritual, channeling, and a sponsored magic, then that'll be -8 refresh. That's all fine and dandy. -2 ritual, -2 channeling, and -4 for generic sponsored magic. Then right below that it says if you have soulfire instead of generic sponsored magic then you'll be at -9 refresh. -2 ritual, -2 channeling, and -5 for soulfire.

Couple of ways to do this.

1: The initial go of combat I would let the people use the strength of their veil as pretty much their roll for stealth like other blocks. ex. Generic Magical block 5b gives you 3 shifts, so that's all you get.
So 1 is an extremely powerful way to go about it

2: Now for doing the maneuvers or subtle actions like you said. The aiming or any other roll that requires you to see the target, you either have to take the -2 from the veil or the mage has to have that in his veil cost. People wanting to throw stuff out of your veil should be allowed as long as it isn't major (see Changes). Attacks would still take down the veil. I think the only way to balance attacking out of a veil would be this example.
ex. You want to throw a rock with weapons value 0. You lean back to toss the rock and roll (effective 5 aim). The mage has to roll discipline to keep the veil up against those shifts since the act of throwing it would disrupt the veil unless he could control it. The reasoning is because you cant underhand toss a rock and expect to do any damage so you really have to wind up and chuck it. Whole body moving for the chuck could disrupt the veil.

3. Attack skill modified by alertness makes sense. BUT I wouldn't make the shifts added by alertness add into extra damage. Just use it for figuring out if the veil is down or not.

I didn't see anything posted here, but JediTigger from EvilHat posted on the DFRPG subreddit. Apparently the only thing left is indexing and to get Jim's blessing. Also an update to spellcasting, and it includes the books/side stories from changes up to ghost story
https://www.reddit.com/r/DresdenFilesRPG/comments/2upmii/paranet_papers_is_practically_done/

Well I'm just going to mention this about radiation doses. Mild to severe doses (10-80 xrays worth of radiation) wont cause symptoms until 6 hours for mild doses to 1 hour for high doses. Wizards and other things that mend wounds wouldn't be affected much by the later symptoms of radiation sickness because they would be able to heal the DNA/other molecules in their body neigh perfectly. http://www.mayoclinic.org/diseases-conditions/radiation-sickness/basics/symptoms/con-20022901

Also don't forget that one of the most radioactive places on earth only gives off about 2mSv/hr which in beta radiation would take about 500 hours next to it to give you 1Gy of radiation. That's enough to give you a headache if my math is right. Unless it's some weird ass place in the never never I wouldn't touch stuff with radiation because either it's not enough radiation or matter, or it's enough radiation to kill your PCs if you wanted to keep it kind of real.

It also works the same when shapeshifting. Say you shapeshift into a bear that has an extra mild consequence. You take both mild consequences and shapeshift back. They will both be healing. Say you only take the extra physical consequence your bear form gives you. It stays on your bear form until it recovers.