Okay, as I've posted elsewhere, I'm mean, but that can be helpful.

Traditionally the sun sets on a day, not a night.
I think the rulers should have horses, not just one horse.
The sun shone with all "its" not "it's" might.

Aside from these petty comments, I'd say that I sense you're forcing your rhymes.  That is, going for the rhyme drags you places that you might prefer not to go, forces you to set up phrases and sentences that aren't what you really want to say or the most effective way to say them or the things you could say or do with words if you weren't lining up a rhyme instead of just using your ear.

For example, maybe:

What they got was something different.
Who they got was a not a warrior but a true gent. 

Relaxes into:

They did not get the warrior they wanted.
They got a gentle man gentle to other men.
And that was marvelous.

I'd look over the first draft and think about the words and images and the sounds and rhythms that are most important to you and build a revision around them and more you like that didn't make it into the first draft.

Hope this helps.

I used to teach prosody.  I am plenty mean.  I write bad poetry.  I love good poetry.

As for line breaks, and punctuation, they're like everything else in poetry: every technical decision justifies itself by delivering meaning.  This goes for free verse as much as for non-metrical verse. Free verse just doesn't have meter and rhyme in the mix.  In all poetry, you're looking for the maximum consonance between meaning and form.  That's the real trick. 

And free verse does have some conventions concerning line breaks.  Heavily enjambed lines, which run sense and syntax over the line endings into the next line, are associated with content that is meditative, private, deeply thoughtful.  This is the kind of line Starbeam suggests.  Lines, especially relatively long lines, that allow a complete through to end with the end of the line tend to come across as public, certain, or oracular.  And Berrylovely strikes a middle ground in "Lonely Moment."  I'd say Berrylovely's choice is fine for her content.  She's talking about a limited time: one moment. And she describes separate thoughts and feelings within the moment, each moment-within-the-moment gets encapsulated in its own line, it's own tick or tock of the duration of the moment.

Example of heavily enjambed:

THIS IS JUST TO SAY

I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast

Forgive me
the were delicious
so sweet
and so cold

--William Carlos Williams

For the oracular, public kind of verse, take a look at Walt Whitman.

There are other ways, of course, to structure lines, but I've been boring long enough.

I uploaded a little avatar to Photobucket.  I tried to get its URL and put it in the URL box, but I couldn't get it here.

Any advice?  Instructions?

Thank you.

If I read "fastener" in a bra description, I'd get a visual of the hooks and eyes in the back, so that's potentially confusing.

How about "right between the cups" (though this may be an inch low for you) or "just above the tiny satin ribbon" (even though most bras don't have these anymore) or "right above the center of my bra" (KIS)? 
You could conduct a study in a lingerie department and possibly use "just above the LaPerla [or other brand] logo." 

Heartily seconded. Two parties alone simply can't adequately represent the diversity of this nation.

Heartily waffling.  While, on the one hand, I'm almost as frustrated with my own party as I am with the other bunch, I would hate to see the US fall into the kind of mess they have in Italy and Israel, where there are numerous parties, so numerous that none can gain a majority on its own.  Every election, they have to form multi-party co-alitions just to come up with a government.  The coalition members all demand concessions and compromises.  Whether they get them or not, the coalitions are always falling apart or threatening to fall apart.  It's not very stable or efficient. 

On the other hand, we've seen ourselves how dramatically both parties can change.  Clinton dragged the Democrats to the center.  Bush II adopted the neo-con agenda.  Neither party is what it was twenty years ago. 

The problem for us is to take control of our parties back to the grass roots and make them what we want them to be, not what they think they have to be to get elected.  We have to stop them focusing on divisive fake problems and force them to address the elephants and donkeys in the living room: abiding by the Constitution, making our healthcare #1 instead of #37, eliminating the national debt, educating our children, recovering our productivity, preserving and improving our environment, and doing government business in real time and the light of day.  I refuse to accept that we cannot; I'm tired of accepting that our parties will not.

I come here for the discussion about "Jim Butcher and things his fans think are cool".

I'm sure that there are plenty of other places where people can go talk about religion & politics.

So did I to begin with, but it seems that religion and politics are cool to some people.  The religion thread got through 200+ postings without war breaking out, and I learned a lot.  The political threads so far have been models of thoughtful discussion and mutual respect--partly because we know we have something important in common (Jim's books & the series). 

And, yes, there are other places, but this feels like home or a great coffee shop, it's the best forum I've ever found, I like the other people here--all of them--and I don't want to screw it up.

On the other hand, if politics gets banned, it won't ruin my day.  But I need something meaty to think about while waiting for the renewal decision to come down.  A girl can only take so many Xanax in a day.

Do you guys get that feeling? I'm getting it again. For about a month now everytime I try to write it's like there's nothing there, and any thing I try to force just comes out awful. And the simple act of trying to write something requires me to nap.

I hate these periods.

Any suggestions on working past it?

Have you ever tried Julia Cameron's The Artist's Way?  It's for writers as much as any other creative type--her seminars are for writers--and is amazingly good at freeing things up and re-stocking the brain.  A creative writing MFA friend put me onto it and it worked--not only on writing but as a general mental-tidy as well.  Gave it to all my friends who were still writing dissertations.  Ardently recommended.