So...Help.

[Wizwad]

I enjoyed it too.  As some of the others said, there are a few too many diversions, but I enjoyed the copious quantities of alcohol, and playing with the language!

I think it sort of falters in the last third, loses its momentun a little, so that might be an area to review, but the punchline seems very Ray Bradbury to me.

[Shecky]

Hey, I enjoy diversions, especially if the writing's intended to be comedic and not just another genre that happens to have comedic aspects to it - much as with Good Omens, the asides/diversions are often what makes it amusing.

[The Corvidian]

Mea tulpa, mea tulpa, mea maxima tulpa ?

Tulpa, a Tibetan word for a thought-form, an artifical spirit.

[the neurovore of Zur-En-Aargh]

Tulpa, a Tibetan word for a thought-form, an artifical spirit.

I know. It was a pun, or play on words, with the intent of humorous effect.

[Wizwad]

I laughed, even without understanding what a Tulpa was.