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Offline meg_evonne

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Let me know if you will read my query letter and five pages.  I would appreciate ALL comments and suggestions and for G**'s sake be brutal, okay?  Thanks!  I'll e-mail them to your message box.

*heading for the corner now so I can sit and think about a new e-mail name--if an agent really wants to read the manuscript---I'll probably chicken out and hit delete.*
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Re: Rip my query & five pages to shreds, all suggestions appreciated....
« Reply #1 on: December 12, 2007, 07:47:47 PM »
Send away, Meg...

Oh, and we're in the process of getting a site up and running expressly for this purpose. It'll be called Third Reader (don't have the url on me right now) and writer's who want constructive feedback are encouraged to submit their writing for critique.

I'll let you know more as I find out. in the mean time, send! Send! Send!
If you are up to no good, please do no good for me too, okay?   ;D

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Re: Rip my query & five pages to shreds, all suggestions appreciated....
« Reply #2 on: December 12, 2007, 07:53:46 PM »
Wow-so.  What a great site idea.  Will send right away.  Thank you!
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Re: Rip my query & five pages to shreds, all suggestions appreciated....
« Reply #3 on: December 12, 2007, 07:54:45 PM »
Welcome!
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Re: Rip my query & five pages to shreds, all suggestions appreciated....
« Reply #4 on: December 12, 2007, 09:42:07 PM »
I'd be happy to give it a read. if you are cool with it I'll pass the papers on to my wife (self published author) and brother in law (Published and somewhat known author)
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Re: Rip my query & five pages to shreds, all suggestions appreciated....
« Reply #5 on: December 12, 2007, 10:53:38 PM »
no problem.  That would be great!
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Re: Rip my query & five pages to shreds, all suggestions appreciated....
« Reply #6 on: December 17, 2007, 01:21:29 AM »
Let me know if you will read my query letter and five pages.  I would appreciate ALL comments and suggestions and for G**'s sake be brutal, okay?  Thanks!  I'll e-mail them to your message box.

*heading for the corner now so I can sit and think about a new e-mail name--if an agent really wants to read the manuscript---I'll probably chicken out and hit delete.*

I'll take a look, if you like.  PS: my msn gets more attention than my other email these days...
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