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Part 3 of "Celebrate the pages you've written.

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probably won't have anything to post here until tomorrow, i just wanted to say I like your title.
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For some reason the thread was locked before I could up in the (55k - Falon II) for yesterday!

Plus, what's up with the new name PG?!

I'll post again later today after I've got some words pounded out.  This sequel won't write itself.



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probably won't have anything to post here until tomorrow, i just wanted to say I like your title.

All part of the service!  :)

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For some reason the thread was locked before I could up in the (55k - Falon II) for yesterday!

Plus, what's up with the new name PG?!

I'll post again later today after I've got some words pounded out.  This sequel won't write itself.



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Had an attack of Dread Whimsy.  It's all the editing.  Makes my thinking parts gooey.

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Had an attack of Dread Whimsy.  It's all the editing.  Makes my thinking parts gooey.


You have to be careful Paynesgrey because you know what they say about editing don't you?!

Editing Rots your Brain!!!  Beware the creativity killer~





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No choice though...  A lot of unnecessary and redundant exposition in that first chapter... gotta dig the polish out of the turd.

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No choice though...  A lot of unnecessary and redundant exposition in that first chapter... gotta dig the polish out of the turd.

Gonna put a nice stain brown sheen on it huh?




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It will gleam the purest gold, like Mark Twain's tears.

The part of the draft is stuff I wrote over 100,000 words ago... I'm spotting a good many flaws and problems I didn't realize were flaws and problems at the time.  Tense, telling, and some chunks of exposition that can be cut entirely.  It's coming together though.  Kind of like returning to a model kit you gave up on as a kid.  Suddenly how to do it right makes sense.  :)


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56k - Falon II




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Re: Arting Harder at the Pen Monkey Toiling Pit (Celebrate Them Pages Pt III)
« Reply #10 on: February 01, 2014, 09:58:16 AM »
57k - Falon II




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Re: Arting Harder at the Pen Monkey Toiling Pit (Celebrate Them Pages Pt III)
« Reply #11 on: February 02, 2014, 12:48:39 AM »
Finished editing what there is of volume #3 and gave it 600 more words of connective tissue.
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Re: Arting Harder at the Pen Monkey Toiling Pit (Celebrate Them Pages Pt III)
« Reply #12 on: February 04, 2014, 11:12:46 AM »
58k - Falon II

After and extended absense from writing I gave myself a good swift kick in the rear and started writing again!  The Conquest of Europe by Poland just isn't on par with writing (Europa Universalise) or so I'm telling myself  :o

59k - Falon II

60k - Falon II

61k - Falon  II

62k - Falon II (5k)

63k - Falon II

64k - Falon II




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Re: Arting Harder at the Pen Monkey Toiling Pit (Celebrate Them Pages Pt III)
« Reply #13 on: February 05, 2014, 01:09:48 PM »
65k - Falon II





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Re: Arting Harder at the Pen Monkey Toiling Pit (Celebrate Them Pages Pt III)
« Reply #14 on: February 06, 2014, 09:13:32 AM »
66k - Falon II





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